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Blue Raine
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PostSubject: Poison   Thu Mar 29, 2007 6:09 am

My Poison

I sipped the poison in the glass.
That final drink may be my last.
I watch slowly as you cruelly laugh.
No one to smite you on my behalf.

I clench my heart in tremendous pain.
With it tightening and tightening like a coiling chain.
She holds in her hand my only cure.
All thoughts gone of you once pure.

On my knees I fall, with echoing noise.
I shall not bow down like your other toys.
I always knew you were deep, cold and dark.
But I foolishly thought, that you had a heart.

My vision so hazy. The world is a blur.
To continue to live. Nothing more I prefer.
My eyes tear up as I cough up more blood.
And I fall to the ground with an empty thud.

~Raine
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PostSubject: Re: Poison   Wed Apr 04, 2007 11:55 pm

nice poem pretty sick from my perspective.
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PostSubject: Re: Poison   Mon May 07, 2007 11:18 pm

Totally awesome for like a rock/metal style song lol...I'd do it too....just figure out a chord progression for it.
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PostSubject: Re: Poison   Tue May 08, 2007 3:27 am

kavyaan wrote:
Totally awesome for like a rock/metal style song lol...I'd do it too....just figure out a chord progression for it.
If you did it as a metal song, something like tornado of souls would probably be good for it.
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